The Witch at the Weir -- Revised (CTG)
The Witch at the WeirThey drowned her with theirrough red hands, strangledher plaintive cries at the streaming weir overhung with willows. They were different times, worrying times. Would we have been...
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Hi Dale and Bernie Yes I like that direct approach. Will adopt and make my own. Many thanks for the feedback both of you. All the best Chris
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Hi Chris!I've enjoyed the image you've created.If you're still seeking suggestions, perhaps begin with the hands and do a littlerearranging.Please don't interpret my suggestionsas an attempt to...
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I've shared so many details as i know them good and bad about american history with my daughter, but never..peine forte et dure, ( French: “strong and hard punishment”). suppressed, so many years....
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Hi BernieOne of my personal heros, Eric Burdon, ex of the Animals, hardscrabble background from Newcastle, in the Northeast of England, somewhat similar to my Liverpool background, though not exact,...
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C---i like the revision very much.bernieand thanks for eric---very much liked hearing him again.(by the way, TinyURL.com will almost instantly shrink the longest URL down to what you see here.)...
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Hi Chris, I think the revision a vast improvement. Love the hard hitting question. It is scary to think that in 1971 I joined the Naval air reserves to avoid going to Viet Nam. It wasn't like today...
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Hello, sir! The title of your poem caught my attention. I instantly wanted/needed to know what a weir was, having never encountered that word before. And I'm a sucker for a witch poem. This witch...
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Is there a way to edit a post on this forum? I haven't a clue if there is. I wanted to change the phrasing at the end to:seeking a place to land.If I knew how to edit my previous comment, I'd've made...
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Hi Laurel Nice to see you here. Many thanks for your kind words and suggestions. Best regards Chris
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liked it-we should remember what some women went through
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Thanks, ack1963. Indeed, we should be aware of this history. Chris
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Chris, the edit works really well. I do miss the line "This is where the witch died," but have to admit it starts with a pop now. Laurel, look under your avatar in your comment box, you should find an...
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Chris---The revision:They drowned her with theirrough red hands, rough red hands a reader might too easily expect (to say nothing of a skin cream commercial); and, to be a prig, what else would they...
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Hi Bernie The revision that is up here is not my preferred version. Folk elsewhere like the original and in some ways as often happens the original impetus is what I like for better or worse. Chris
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ChrisI like the revision a bit better.I have a suggestion for the final stanzathat could leave the poem withoutthe question but I felt close it a little tighter.Would we have been the ones to force...
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Love your revision and strongly approved of the original as evidenced by my wanting to help with revision. Original or revision, this poem is memorable and great food for thought.
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I like the way my mind takes their (hands) and the sound "weir" and places "we're" up against the accusing their. Can't help feeling S 2 could acknowledge the only slightly hidden we're in weir, and...
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